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The Table Below Shows the Results of Surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 About One University.

The Table Below Shows the Results of Surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 About One University.
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The table provides information regarding the
ratings
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 of one university, split by five different
aspects
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 over a fifteen-year
period
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, from 2000 to 2010. Units are measured by
percent
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per cent
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.
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, the
ratings
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 rose in all
aspects
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 but two
aspects
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,
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 and were highest in Print
Resources
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. It can be seen that
most
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the most
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 significant
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ratings
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rating
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 87% was in Printing
Resources
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 and slightly increased in 2005 before falling to 88% in the
last
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period
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. The figure
fo
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for
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 Electronic
Resources
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originally
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 lower than that for Printing
Resources
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.
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, electronic
resources
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 increased dramatically to 72 and reached the highest in 2010.
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, technical quality increased slightly in 2010 after falling in the previous five years. Turning to two other
aspects
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, crystal clear that
Range
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the Range
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 of Modules offered had the lowest
ratings
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 from 2000 to 2010 which gradually decreased and reached its lowest point at 27% in
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last
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the last
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period
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. Regarding building/teaching facilities, it remained the same over the
period
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 given.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ratings, aspects, period, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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