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In modern life, it is
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believed
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individuals
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 some scientists
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, it is better to read
books
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library
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books
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 on the computer are more useful and contain more information than those in the
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inspite
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in spite
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 of the single
motive
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 is that the libraries have many
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, a recent study by Cambridge University found
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that as people read
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. On the other side of the coin, there are given some benefits
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. Many students think that social networks are
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useful
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 is that the
adventage
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advantage
 of reading
books
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 on phones is that
books
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 that are not available in the
library
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 both sides are
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useful
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 of the positive ideas.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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