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In modern life, it is
belived
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believed
 some
inividuals
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individuals
according to
 some scientists
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argue
, it is better to read
books
 in the
library
.
While
 others consider that
books
 on the computer are more useful and contain more information than those in the
library
. Both views will be discussed ensuring paragraphs
as well as
 a personal conclusion will be provided. On the
one
 hand,
inspite
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in spite
 of the fact that it is
books
 the
library
don't
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 loss and
also
 very much useful several benefits. The most significant
one
 is
that is
 comfortable to read.
One
 of the single
motive
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 is that the libraries have many
books
 .
For instance
, a recent study by Cambridge University found
is
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that as people read
books
 on their phones, various eye problems occur, unlike
books
 in the
library
. On the other side of the coin, there are given some benefits
for
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. Many students think that social networks are
usefull
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useful
 to read . But
one
 of the
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remarkable
one
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 is that the
adventage
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advantage
 of reading
books
 on phones is that
books
 that are not available in the
library
 can be found on the phone . Some people
belive
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 it is almost impossible to explicate
this
 concept in any
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 way .
To sum up
 ,
this
 essay discussed the main positive and negative sides. In my
opinion
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 both sides are
usefull
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useful
 and
one
 of the positive ideas.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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