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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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The provided maps illustrate the
island
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 before and after the tourist facilities developed. The
island
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 is approximately 250 meters long, with palm trees around it. The
island
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surrounded
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 by the sea and there is a small beach in the west. Over the period, the
island
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 was completely transformed, and many
buildings
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 were constructed to serve the tourist visitor.
However
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, the east part of the
island
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 still has not been developed. The most noticeable addition is the
hotel
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. There are 6
hotel
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buildings
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 on the west part surrounding the palm trees
while
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 the other 9
hotel
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buildings
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 were built in the centre of the
island
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.
Furthermore
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, the reception and the restaurant were developed and located between the 2 sides of the
hotel
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buildings
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. Meanwhile, the pier has
also
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 been constructed near the south of the
island
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.
As a result
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, tourist is able to travel to
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island
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the island
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 by ship or boat.
Although
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 the beach
was remained
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remained
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 the same, its purpose is to be used for swimming.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, buildings, hotel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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