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Many parents are letting their kids buy whatever they

These days, many
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 are letting their kids buy whatever they want and do whatever they want.
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 essay suggests that allowing
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 to allow
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 leads to bad situations. On the one hand, I think it depends on how the
parents
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 raised their
children
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 from a young age. If the
child
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 is allowed to do what the
parents
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 do from a young age so that the
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 do not deceive them with lies,
then
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 the
child
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 will not deceive the
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. Now he will allow good deeds and not
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 bad deeds. Only
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, even after the
child
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 grows up, he will not cheat and his upbringing will not be disturbed. Again, it depends on the
child
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.
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, if
parents
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 allow their
children
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 to do what they want, it can lead to a bad situation and the upbringing may be disturbed.
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,
parents
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 may not know that they do bad things without asking their
parents
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. So I think it has its pros and cons. In conclusion, buy their kids whatever they want and their kids do whatever they want.
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 work of
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affect
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 the good and bad
behavior
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behaviour
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 of
children
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, whether it is bad or good.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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