Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have health problems as a result. •Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? •What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Keeping our mental, and physical well-being in good condition, especially in our over-paced world, is quite challenging. Most of the working places in Hungary, do not pay enough attention to the elementary needs of the worker’s body, and mind. In my essay, I will discuss the problem caused by insufficient exercise during working days, and I try to reveal some possible solutions, as well. I clearly can remember the time, when I went to play tennis as much, as I could, probably 5 times a week,

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I worked a lot as well. Now, I am happy, if I can get to the tennis court 2 or 3 times a month. The difference between the past, and the present is, that tasks have doubled, and spare time has completely disappeared. Nowadays everyone builds their own businesses, careers, and their own life, without any chance to find some gap in their timetable to go to the gym

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, the lower the sporting activity is, the higher the risks of any fitness issues.

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, companies have to make important decisions, about keeping employee’s physical condition well. They should open places, like gyms or health centres close to the office,

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needs to be reduced. As the physical activity increases among the workers the effectiveness, and quality of the work will boost immediately. In conclusion, if the leaders try to take care of their workers’ health condition responsibly, it will

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the company’s performance.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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