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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •Say why he/she would not enjoy going college •Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •Suggest the types of jobs that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear Raman, I'm writing to let you know that you should try to find a job as you should be independent and try to save some money for your own college fees. As with schools you have to go to college regularly and it's a kind of a boring thing.Colleges are extremely expensive and employers don't even ask for degrees.They give preference to practical experience over theory.that's why I think you should start looking for a job . I know you are struggling now because of your financial situation.
Due to
 the labour shortage,many companies are looking for the right candidates regardless of their qualifications;
therefore
,I think you should give it a try. I suggest you apply for warehouse work namely IKEA and Amazon.The chances of getting raise in
this
 kind of work are pretty high.They
also
 give good incentives.I recently saw an advertisement by Amazon that they give experience to new candidates which could be beneficial in future when you will apply for a greater position in a good company. Yours sincerely, Sukh
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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