Most countries have traditional celebrations that occur annually. In your opinion, what benefits do these celebrations have for society? Support your opinion with reasons and example from your own Knowledge and experience.

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their tradition as a

festivals

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. From my perspective, it has a multitude of

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community. In

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the ground advantages and suitable proof of a vital

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ritual or custom celebration.

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with, a host of pros of

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celebrating

traditional festival. First and foremost, these festivals play a role to connect

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community members with each other. For

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instance

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these festival

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at home and

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invite

their friends and family:

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a way of

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, when they celebrate their rituals get more faith

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their customs. For

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traditional

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God and

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their God.

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generation to their rituals.

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like India

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their

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, tradition and ritual celebrates their festivals.

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their God 'Rama' which automatically

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their younger generation with their rituals. In conclusion, there is

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fact that celebrating

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tradition

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a multitude of benefits. Henceforth, we need to

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these festival

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with love and

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joy

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Most countries have traditional celebrations that occur annually. In your opinion, what benefits do these celebrations have for society? Support your opinion with reasons and example from your own Knowledge and experience.

Fully explain your ideas

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