Some people belive that children should spend all of their free time with their families . Others belive that is unncenssary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and say which side you personally support.

Some argue that leisure

time

habits of

children

should

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with their families in different ways,

while

others believe that

this

is contributes

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to

a

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negative implications.I share

this

view that toddlers

shouldOn

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should

the one hand,

technologies

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technology

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can be a source of distraction for

children

, because when youngsters use electronic devices in their free

time

without family members, resulting in they can

be occur

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even

the

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crime which is increasingly common among teenagers.

Futhermore

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Furthermore

, it can distract them from studies and other important commitments

such

as sports,

this

is because they want to live liberty as they want without families and it can lead to

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low value

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of

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lifestyle. rely on their families in

leisure

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their leisure

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time

.

On the other

hand

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teens should spend their leisure

time

for

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with

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parents or siblings,

this

is because when

children

occupied

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with important

task

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, they are deprived of chances for the best moments of happiness

such

as birthday parties or wedding days. It is

also

worth

meantioning

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mentioning

that parents should control their

children

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children's

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tasks and

homeworks

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homework

. Having bolstered their cognitive abilities from a young age,

children

are likely to perform well at school which is essential for their future success.

To sum up

,

although

this

trend provides a number of facilities, I am more inclined to say that parents should control their

children

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children's

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free

time

.