government should spend money on railways than roads

Nowadays many
kind
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of
vehicle
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vehicles
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have improved and there is a question about
on
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apply
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which kind of
transport
the
government
should spend money
.
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I agree with
this
statement because
the
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railways
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railway's
railways'
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transport
should get more attention and the
government
should develop
this
kind of
transport
.
This
essay will discuss why the
government
should spend money more on
trains
rather than on
roads
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road
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transport
. First of all,
railways
transport
is safer than
roads
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transport
, the biggest number of accidents has the road vehicle,
for
instance
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the
princess
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Princess
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of Wales Diana tragically died in
car
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a car
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accident and million other lives too.
Trains
have more
privilige
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privilege
such
as transportation the huge amount of goods,
for example
after mining hard coal, it
transport
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is transport
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by train because
trains
have a lot of space rather than lorries and obviously cars.
Moreover
,
railways
transport
pollute
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less CO2 and other detrimental gases, which
destroying
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our ecosystem.
Secondly
, the
railways
are more
convinient
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convenient
to travel
on
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long
distance
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distances
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, you are not stressed because of not sleeping and driving a car
so
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long, you
also
have an opportunity to sleep
due to
having a pillow, a
blancket
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blanket
and a mattress. There
are
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is
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a toilet
in
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on
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trains
so you do not have to stop
on
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at
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petrol
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the petrol
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station. In conclusion, I want to say that the
railways
should get more money because there are more
benefit
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benefits
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of it and the
government
should invest in its
developing
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as
trains
do not cause so much huge detrimental problems to our environment and people's lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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