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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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These two maps depict a public
park
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 when it first opened in 1920 and the same
park
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 today, and it shows all the changes that had done from that time until now.
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, the
park
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 had almost 14 sections, there were many changes had been done, at the same time small details were in the same place,
such
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 as the two rose gardens still in the same place, but one of them had been replaced with a café.
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 the middle of the
park
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, there was a, today it replaced with rose garden with many seats around it,
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, the stage of musicians which was located on the right of the fountain it renovated and it becomes an amphitheatre for concerts. Right of the corner there was a pond for water plants, now it becomes a children’s play area, as there was a glasshouse, now, it replaced with a beautiful water feature.
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,
this
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park
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 has not had parking,
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, the underground car
park
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 was added to the
park
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.
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, Arnoldo Avenue is a magnificent place which can any family enjoy their time.
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