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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #money #computer #technology #functions
It is considered
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the
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 library which is used by general people and the finance
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used for its renewal services
are
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 unwanted. with the development of
technology
, these
libraries
 can be taken over.
Library
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 is a place where all kind of
information
 is available. It usually
have
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 scheduled timings which make the user
to
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adjust their timing.
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 time consumed to find
a
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specific content is a lot making it
user unfriendly
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. Often, it may happen that required
information
 is not available.
For example
, once I was searching for
information
 related to my thesis work and I hardly found anything.
Technology
 is a source through which we can do various activities. it can be used
any time
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 and
also
 anywhere making it easily accessible for the individual.
Technology
 contains
bulk
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 of
information
. Targeted context can be made available at
fingertips
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 by the use of
internet
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the internet
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. Numerous
libraries
 are present which
make
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the
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public
libraries
 useless
due to
 no confined, timings person does not need to disturb their schedules,
such
as for
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children in
encyclopedia
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like
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features are ready to use on gadgets.
To conclude
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the advantage
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advantage
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 given by
technology
 over the physical
libraries
, it will not be wrong to say that services will be more used by the community than
old
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an old
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 room of bookshelves.
Thus
, it will be of no use to invest huge money in its
restoreation
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restoration
 and other activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
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