The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashion. The new fashion will be to have several other career or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Discuss both views and give your opinion with relevant examples.

In recent years, as
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technoledge
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the net.
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, some people believe that learning becomes a lifetime
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and we can have several skills for different jobs at the same time.
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many regard
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as a new way of work form, in my opinion,
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having a single career is old-fashioned. Because we can take advantage of
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to improve our
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in the area and connect our expertise with other fields.
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that most
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teenagers would like to have two or more jobs in the meantime to try out what they really like. To be more specific,
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youngers tend to have many part-time jobs
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formal
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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