Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
While
some believe that adding more sports
centres into public spaces would lead to a better improvement of the overall
health status of people
living in communities, others argue that it would not have any significant impact, and there ought to be other alternative mechanisms in place to keep people
healthy. Although
the increase in the number of sports
facilities might result in a greater proportion of residents going for more exercise, without proper education, people
would not be aware that one must be physically active to be healthy.
People
need spaces to do sports
. That is
why having as many sports
stadiums in a community as possible is considered one of the best ways to keep the public healthy. With gyms in every corner of the city, people
can conveniently access the ones nearest to their homes or workplaces. As a result
, more and more people
will go for exercise and be able to do a wide range of physical activities. For instance
, the Olympic Stadium was purposively built at the heart of Phnom Penh city, and it can be seen that it is always filled with people
, especially during the before- and after-work hours and weekends. However
, I think having physical infrastructure is not enough to encourage people
to be physically active, and education is a more efficient way to inform the public about healthy lifestyles.
The reason why educating people
is a more powerful strategy to enhance public health is that it teaches people
how to correctly lead a healthy life, and with such
knowledge, one would have the motivation to go to gyms regularly. Informing the public about the different types of physical activities and how to schedule them would have tremendous effects on gymgoers. For instance
, many sports
centres these days offer personalised training programs, where trainees can have one-on-one sessions with trainers who are professionally trained and equipped with knowledge and skills on how to effectively do certain types of exercises. Consequently
, many gymgoers can actively do physical training without hurting their muscles. Thus
, I think it is more important that people
are educated and well aware of what they should do during the sports
sessions to achieve a healthy life goal.
In conclusion, while
some argue that the increase in the number of sports
facilities is the key to public health improvement, I think it is more crucial that people
are taught how to properly do sports
because this
will tell them how to effectively and efficiently build a healthy lifestyle.Submitted by emteeme on
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