The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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of
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the best method to teach children to
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cooperate
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is through group
sports
at school.
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I completely agree with the statement,because in hunter-gatherer societies in the past,
people
lived and hunted with
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teams
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on the caves.All these features were passed down from generation to generation. In my point of
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the best way
of
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teach
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students to teamwork is through
team
sports
at school
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because
people
are
social
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creature
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and for a long time we lived in a grotto and in
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today
each human behaviours are like in past.I think that
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creating
sports
teams are
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a better
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way for working together.
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:the teacher one day
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me and my groupmates
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project and
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observed that student when
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togather
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together
to gather
,they
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the most profitable and could solve
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everything
whatever teacher give anything.
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,
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my mind,the groupmates in
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teamwork
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have to be in
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mind,because if any group member was think
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idea,
this
can be
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of time.That's why in my opinion students must be
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hardworking
hard working
and smart,
then
this
team
can solve
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everything
It does not matter what is
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a problem
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.As an example:Some
people
when was been
team
,they could not work togather,they often argue on some ideas and only one member can spread the group,Because of In my point of view the
people
who choosen for
team
work must be capable and at least they have to been any
team
at past. In conclude,peope think that the best way of to teach the children to co-operate is through
team
sports
at school,I completely agree that
this
is better method.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • values
  • applied
  • aspects
  • belonging
  • camaraderie
  • participating
  • essential
  • social skills
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