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The chart and the table show the Japan's population past, present and the future trens

The chart and the table show the Japan's population past, present and the future trens
The bar chart illustrates the number of citizens in Japan for all age levels over 65
years
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 from 1985 to 2015 and the prediction of the sum of
people
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 from 2035 to 2055
while
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 the table shows the population and total population of citizens aged 65
years
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 or over during the period given.
Overall
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 the figure for
people
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 in Japan increased every year from 1985 to 2000 and
then
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 decreased slightly until 2015. The estimated proportion of
people
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 will continuously decline from 2015 to 2055. Even though, the total percentage of
people
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 aged 65
years
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 or over rises constantly up to 2055. Turning to the details it is evident that from 1950 the number of
people
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 in Japan was at about 84 ,1
million
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. After 50
years
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 the figure increased to 126,9
million
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people
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 in 2000
then
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 peaked at 127,8
million
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 five
years
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 later.
Furthermore
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, the number of Japan’s
people
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 decline to approximately 125,4
million
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people
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 and will be estimated continuously increase to 89,9
million
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 in 2035.
On the other hand
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, the total percentage of the population aged 65
years
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 or over grew up from 4,9 %
million
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people
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 in 1950 to 20 % in 2005.
This
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 figure will be predicted to elevate to 41 %
million
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people
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 in 2055.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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