While in some countries children start school at the age of four, in other countries they start at the age of seven. Some people believe that starting school early affects the relationships between parents and children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of starting school early and give you own opinions.

In some parts of the
world
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children
start
school
at the
age
of seven
on the contrary
other parts of the world
children
start
school
earlier. It is believed that starting education at an early
age
affects
relationship
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between
children
and parents. From
the
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point of my view yes it can affect
relationship
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relationships
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between family members but
also
it has some advantages. Starting
school
at an early
age
can obstacle communication between family members because
children
start
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school
early can not spend time with
his
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family.
Due to the
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fact that his or her personal development can
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negative
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way because family takes
important
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role in
children
's personal development. All the people learn first
informations
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from their family
for instance
rules about society life and culture.
For
this
reason
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children
should spend
his
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their
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childhood with family. If not he or she can not learn
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from any other source.
For
example
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my family always support me when I was
child
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a child
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and they spend time with me but they could not do
this
for my younger brother
as a result
of
this
now I am kinder and more
succesfull
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successful
than my brother.
However
, starting education early has some advantages too.
Children
's brains are empty teachers can shape and fill
it
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them
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with necessary beneficial things like critical thinking.
Furthermore
,
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the informations
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informations
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which people got
it
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when he was
child
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a child
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are the most permanent
informations
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. Recent
researches
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research
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shows that
3rd
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the 3rd
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age
is the most suitable
age
for starting
school
. 3 year old kids can understand some simple
informations
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faster than younger and older ages. Professionals say that parents should not miss these ages. In conclusion, starting
school
early has advantages
on
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academic success and
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disadvanages
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disadvantages
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on
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relationship
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relationships
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between family members. Families should think about that and they should calculate which one is heavier.
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