While in some countries children start school at the age of four, in other countries they start at the age of seven. Some people believe that starting school early affects the relationships between parents and children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of starting school early and give you own opinions.
In some parts of the
world
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,world
children
start school
at the age
of seven on the contrary
other parts of the world children
start school
earlier. It is believed that starting education at an early age
affects relationship
between Add an article
the relationship
children
and parents. From the
point of my view yes it can affect Change the word
my
relationship
between family members but Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
also
it has some advantages.
Starting school
at an early age
can obstacle communication between family members because children
start
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who start
school
early can not spend time with his
family. Correct pronoun usage
their
Due to the
fact that his or her personal development can Change preposition
The
affected
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be affected
negative
way because family takes Change the word
negatively
important
role in Add an article
an important
children
's personal development. All the people learn first informations
from their family Change the wording
information
pieces of information
for instance
rules about society life and culture. For
this
reason
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,reason
children
should spend his
childhood with family. If not he or she can not learn Correct pronoun usage
their
this things
from any other source. Change the determiner
this thing
these things
For
example
my family always support me when I was Add a comma
,example
child
and they spend time with me but they could not do Add an article
a child
this
for my younger brother as a result
of this
now I am kinder and more succesfull
than my brother.
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successful
However
, starting education early has some advantages too. Children
's brains are empty teachers can shape and fill it
with necessary beneficial things like critical thinking. Correct pronoun usage
them
Furthermore
, Correct article usage
the informations
informations
which people got Change the wording
information
pieces of information
it
when he was Correct pronoun usage
apply
child
are the most permanent Add an article
a child
informations
. Recent Change the wording
information
pieces of information
researches
shows that Fix the agreement mistake
research
3rd
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the 3rd
age
is the most suitable age
for starting school
. 3 year old kids can understand some simple informations
faster than younger and older ages. Professionals say that parents should not miss these ages.
In conclusion, starting Change the wording
information
pieces of information
school
early has advantages on
academic success and Change preposition
for
has
Unnecessary verb
apply
disadvanages
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disadvantages
disadvantage
on
Change preposition
for
relationship
between family members. Families should think about that and they should calculate which one is heavier.Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
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