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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
It is often thought that humans have many
choices
 these days. I strongly agree
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this
 opinion and I will discuss my thoughts on the statement.
To begin
 with, the availability of technology has brought about
change
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 in our everyday life
choices
.There are many websites, brands and platforms that influence our preferences nowadays.
For instance
, there are different types of mobile phones that can help you make decisions
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like iPhone,
sumsung
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Samsung
, techno and
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. Someone who likes taking pictures will like a phone with
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good camera quality so he or she will have time to think and
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 on the type of phone to buy.
Therefore
,
this
 would have been impossible if there was only one handset available all over the world. It would have had a toll on the individual who would have
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 to purchase
different
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.
Also
, these phones listed above have
their
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features that can help with your choice description.
Hence
, technology now
have
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 an influence
in
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 our daily life
choices
.
Furthermore
, the influence of peer pressure
have
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 an impact
in
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 our
lives
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 options. One can plan for an event or program but meant ask a close friend
of
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 her cloth choice.
For example
, I remember my sister asked me
of
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 my opinion on her wedding dress and event
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 some time ago and
on
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 my reply, she became confused as to which one she
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 to choose from. Again, a friend's choice of career path would have much effect on someone who
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 planned much about their future plans because there
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lot of options to select from. In conclusion, I agree
to
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 the statement above that nowadays people have too many
choices
 because of access to technology and peer pressure.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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