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The government pay tuition fees for university students. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#government #tuition #fees #university #students
The world witnessing inflation since everything become expensive,
such
 as rent,
fees
, transport, and others, and
that is
 lead to more focus on the financial aspect for all people, here in the essay I will discuss the pros and cons of paying the
fees
instead
 of
students
 for their universities. First of all, the first advantage that the
government
 trying to do, by paying the
fees
 for the universities, will make
students
' life easier, since they are not forced to work part-time or full-time to fulfil the uni's requirements,
for example
: Most of the
students
 who travel abroad are working to pay their
fees
, expenses and other to achieve their goals.
Secondly
, the
Government
 is motivating
students
 to focus on their studies by paying
instead
 of them, since a number of
students
 even not thinking to
study
 owing to the fee of the
university
, so by doing that, the percentage of the
students
 who achieve their goal will be increased, and the country
overall
 will benefit from their knowledge to achieve more successes.
On the other hand
, the
students
 who do not care about their
study
,
university
 life or even the years they are being in the
university
, by doing so, they are occupying seats in the departments, which lead to some other
students
 forced to travel abroad to
study
 in
this
 faculty,
for example
, I had forced to travel abroad because I did not get the chance to
study
 in my country,
furthermore
, not all the
students
 will feel the responsibility even to complete the
study
 since the
government
 pay
instead
 of them,
for instance
, some
students
 arrive to the second year
then
 leave the
university
 to join other faculty or even work.
To conclude
, I agree the
government
 should pay the
fees
instead
 of the
students
, to be motivated, but the
students
 must occupy the seats to achieve their goals and not take
this
 opportunity
instead
 of other
students
.
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