In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

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In the highly developed universe, standard
life
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expectancy is enlarged. The downside is a decrease in
life
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satisfaction
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the constant pursuit of more material possessions and the most viable solution
of
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this
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is to lower
standards
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and enjoy
life
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. Day by day countries are developing and at the same
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standards
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are increasing. Two out of three
people
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work hard to live in a good house and earn a high amount of money and
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parents make their children
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be well educated even
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have other desires.
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they sacrifice both their time and their lives.
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leads to them always being stressed and their relationships with loved ones decrease so they don't enjoy their
life
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. Resources show that raising the standard of living above the basic subsistence level doesn’t allow individuals to thrive and societies to flourish. To tackle
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issue world population should stop competing for their lives with each other and
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should decrease
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. It is better if
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standardize their living conditions and
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continue to live in balance. Because it doesn’t make sense to sacrifice our future for a comfortable
life
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standard. From my point of view,
people
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should utilize modernization for
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a better
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quality
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life
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of life
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. The key difference between
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the standard
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of living and quality of
life
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is that standard of living is primarily focused on a person's income, education level, and access to goods and services,
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quality
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the quality
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of
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is focused on a person's
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well-being, including factors
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as happiness, health, and community. In conclusion, the enlarged
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standards
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make our universe unlivable.
People
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must find ways to live in the best conditions without destroying their lives. We come to
life
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once and we should know its worth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average life expectancy
  • developed world
  • increase
  • individuals
  • society
  • personal goals
  • ambitions
  • quality of life
  • leisure
  • recreation
  • healthcare costs
  • challenges
  • healthcare system
  • ageing population
  • shortage
  • available workers
  • economy
  • retirement planning
  • healthy lifestyles
  • investing
  • social support systems
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