Differences between countries are barely evident these days. Everyone in the world is wearing the same brand and watching the same TV channels and movies. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?
It is certainly true that today difference between nations has decreased.
People
in
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apply
the
worldwide Correct article usage
apply
is dressing
the same Wrong verb form
dress in
clothes
and watching
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watch
the
similar content Correct article usage
apply
in
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on
the
television and Correct article usage
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movies
. In my perspective, Change preposition
in movies
this
can considered a positive trend, because it can reduce the gap between countries and bring people
together as well as
assist to solve
global Change preposition
in solving
issues
.
To begin
with, there are several reasons why I believe that similarity between individuals regardless clothes
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of clothes
as well as
what they watch on the
TV can have benefits Correct article usage
apply
to
the whole world. Change preposition
for
Firstly
, If all people
around the world wear the same clothing I think this
can reduce the gap between wealthy and poor people
. For example
, the
most Correct article usage
apply
people
regardless of their physical status they
can purchase jeans, which Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
can contribute to Correct pronoun usage
apply
reduce
the gap between nations . Change the verb form
reducing
Furthermore
, simailar
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similar
clothes
can eliminate the
discrimination against Correct article usage
apply
clothes
, which this
can minimize the violence in our society. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Therefore
, this
can leads reduce
the rate of crime Wrong verb form
lead to a reduction in
on
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in
community
.
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the community
Secondly
, if the
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people
watch the same movies
or TV program
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programs
this
can make people
share the same interest
and Fix the agreement mistake
interests
issues
. To illustrate, this
can make people
take actions
to solve these Fix the agreement mistake
action
issues
. For instance
, if all people
around the world watching
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watch
program
or documentary Fix the agreement mistake
programs
movies
about climate change, this
can raising
awareness among Change the verb form
raise
be raising
people
about these issue
. Change the determiner
this issue
these issues
As a result
, people
will adopt measures to tackle this
problem namely, taking public transport, cycling , reduce the consumptions
of goods, which Fix the agreement mistake
consumption
this
can Correct pronoun usage
apply
leads
to Change the verb form
lead
mitigate
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mitigating
the
climate change by Correct article usage
apply
minimiz
the Co2 emissions in the atmosphere.
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minimising
To sum up
, In my opinion sharing the same clothes
and movies
and television is positive
development and can contribute to Add an article
a positive
solve
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solving
the
global Correct article usage
apply
issues
such
as,
discrimination, crime, Remove the comma
apply
environmental
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and environmental
crisis
.Fix the agreement mistake
crises
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