Some parents believe that watching TV and playing computer games should be limited and substituted by book reading. Do you agree or disagree?
It is believed by
few
parents that there should be limitations on spending time on television and playing computer Correct article usage
a few
games
. This
essay agrees with the statement that such
kind of entertainment souces
should be replaced by book reading.
First and Correct your spelling
sources
formost
, sitting in front of Correct your spelling
foremost
TV
and playing Add an article
the TV
vedio
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video
games
effect
the child's mental Correct your spelling
affect
as well as
physical health
. To ellaborate
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elaborate
this
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on this
kids
these days watch TV
for long hours, they
try to do the same thing shown Correct word choice
and they
in
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on
TV
such
as fighting in superheroes movies, using
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and using
some
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apply
anapproriate
products or Correct your spelling
inappropriate
appropriate
equipments
. addition of playing computer Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
games
results
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inresults
fromresults
weekness
in eyes. Correct your spelling
weakness
Consequentely
, it affects their mental and physical Correct your spelling
Consequently
health
. Moreover
, these sources of entertainment reduces
the growth of Change the verb form
reduce
childern
. Correct your spelling
children
Kids
these days do not like to play outdoor gaming such
as bedminton
, tennis, football and so on. Unless these activities they always have Correct your spelling
badminton
curiosity
to play latest computer Add an article
the curiosity
a curiosity
games
.
However
, these unhealty
activities should be replaced by book reading. Book reading is one of the best Correct your spelling
unhealthy
way
to learn and gain knowledge. Reading Change to a plural noun
ways
books
help kids
to increase their level of concentrstion
. Reading skills Correct your spelling
concentration
becomes
better by spending time on Change the verb form
become
books
. Furthermore
, by reading books
, kids
can feel more confortable
and Correct your spelling
comfortable
relax
. Reading Wrong verb form
relaxed
books
helps in escaping the kids
from study stresses not for some time but it is a permanent solution.
Conclusion
, watching Change preposition
In conclusion
TV
and playing vedio
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video
games
reduces the health
as well as
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the weekens
weekens
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weakens
weekends
weekend
the
child. Parents should give Change preposition
of the
thier
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their
kids
intresting
stories Correct your spelling
interesting
books
to attract them toward reading. They should tell their children about the Correct word choice
and books
benifits
of reading over playing laptop Correct your spelling
benefits
games
or watching television. This
will help them in improving their child
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child's
health
as well as
reading skillsSubmitted by yogitakainth4502 on
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