The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anomake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, anomake comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the
amount
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of stores that closed and the
number
of new outlets that opened between 2011 and 2018 in one country.
Overall
, there was a fluctuation between shop openings and closures in the given time period.
Furthermore
, there was a switch in the position, with the former’s period (2011) having store openings at the top and the latter’s (2018) changing to outlet closures. Regarding shop openings, the
number
of new stores reached 8,500 in 2011, and
then
the
number
plummeted quickly by 4,500 outlets (to 4,000) in 2012.
Moreover
, the trend rose considerably and reached
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2,000 in 2014 before
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to 4,000 in 2015.
Then
, the graph remained stable in 2016 and slightly increased in 2017, after which it declined by 1,000 to 3,000 in 2018. Turning to store closures, there were fluctuating trends between 2011 and 2014 before the
number
plunged rapidly by 6,000 shops in 2015.
Then
, the trend climbed significantly by 4,500 stores in the following year, and after that, it remained constant at around 5,000 outlets between 2017 and 2018.
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