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The chart below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart presents the proportion of
households
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 with owned electrical appliances in three types, washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 and the amount of spending
time
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of
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on
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 housework in a
week
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 by
households
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 in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, there was
a
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an
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increased
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increase
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 of using electrical appliances by
households
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.
However
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, the
time
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spend
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spent
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 in a
week
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 of housework by
households
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 has decreased between 1920 and 2019. Regarding the percentage of
households
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used
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that used
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 electrical appliances, we can see that consumption
washing
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of washing
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machine
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machines
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 increased slightly around 30% from 1920 to 1960,
then
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 fluctuated between 1960 and 2019.
Furthermore
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, using of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 climbed dramatically towards the
time
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 period, going from 0% to 100% and from 30% to 100% between 1920 and 2019, respectively. Turning to the amount of spending
time
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of
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on
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 housework in a
week
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, there was a dramatic decline
around
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of around
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 30
hours
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 per
week
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 (from 50
hours
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 to 20
hours
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) between 1920 and 1960, after that decreased slightly
around
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to around
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 10
hours
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 from 1960 to 2019.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, time, week, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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