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Nowadays computer education is compulsory for learners in most schools. Do you think it is necessary or will children acquire these skills naturally from their day interaction with technology everywhere? Discuss both and give your opinion.

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Adaption is needed in regard to the advancement of technology so that we can use and utilize it
to
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 our everyday life. Technology these days is getting more advanced, including
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computers
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. There is
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whether
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about whether
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 to learn
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computers
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 in
school
 or
these
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whether these
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 skills will be developed naturally in day-to-day interaction. The following essay will discuss my point of view regarding
this
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matter
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. My notion is that both
computer
education
 and self-taught
computer
education
 are needed.
Firstly
,
computer
education
 in
school
 will definitely be taught by a professional teacher or
expert
.
Therefore
, children will absorb the skill and knowledge in a proper manner. Youngsters will
also
 undertake practical
lesson
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 that will be supervised by the
expert
 to enhance their ability in using
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the computer
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.
Moreover
,
this
 will be beneficial for
students
 who aspire to be a
computer
engineer
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engineers
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 or
scientist
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scientists
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, they will get the example directly from
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 expertise.
For example
,
students
 will learn how to read
computer
 language programs, how to create websites, how to study the systems
,
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 and other practical skills.
Secondly
, day-to-day utilization of
computer
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 is
also
 needed.
This
 helps kids to familiarize
and
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 to remember how to use it. Just by simply opening the Microsoft
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 to write something or playing games
in
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 a
computer
,
for instance
.
Students
 can
also
 re-learn the
computer
 subjects that
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 been taught in
school
, at home.
Additionally
, their skills
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computer
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 will greatly improved. In conclusion,
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learning
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 a
computer
 skill in
school
 alone will
may
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apply
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not be sufficient for
students
 to be an
expert
 in
computer
 science. If they do not want to be an
expert
, to re-study what they have learnt in
school
 will be beneficial to them to keep familiar with the utilization of the
computer
 itself. In essence, both
school
-taught and self-taught
computer
education
 are needed.
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