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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, more and more clients argue employers prefer employing
people
 who have high levels of social
skills
instead
 their academic qualifications.
While
 other groups of the community claim that it is better to hire workers who have great academic qualifications. I completely agree that companies tend to hire
people
 who have more social
skills
. First of all,
it is clear that
 community
skills
 were important in the past to now, humans improve their technology by cooperating with each other, there
also
 makes their lives better. Take some examples, a lot of famous achievements can not complete by one person only,
such
 as the Eiffel Tower or the Statue of Liberty.
Therefore
, it is well for a
company
 that employs the public who have good community abilities, they have able to collaborate with other workers and make a number of plans for the
company
 more effectively.
On the other hand
, even that pollution which has a wide range of knowledge and plenty of quantifications, it is still difficult to take action alone without the help of another one, and obviously that
people
's energy is limited.
Moreover
, it is hard to ensure that higher academic qualifications are equal to good practice and leadership abilities,
people
 who have less aware of cooperation still hard finish the project by
company
 given because of their lower socials
skills
 even though they are smart and study more theories. In conclusion, I believe that unbelievable power is gathered from every individual's energy,
hence
 think like a
company
 owner, it will bring more benefits if you employ the public who have high-level social
skills
 and leadership abilities.
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