Some people believe that smoking cigarettes should be banned. On the other hand, there are those who disagree with this measure. Do you agree or disagree with the banning of cigarettes?

People
have been dependent
to
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cigarettes
and it has been
a
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prevalence
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in
contemporary
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era. Research tells us that
cigarettes
are addictive,
however
, smokers find it hard to quit smoking. In relation to
health
, there are
many
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disrepute. Despite the damaging effects that smoking
cigarettes
could give, there are debates on whether smoking
cigarettes
should be banned or not. I would say that I agree smoking
cigarettes
should be banned. The following essay will share my thoughts
in
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the issue. First and foremost, smoking will jeopardize
the
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smokers’
health
. Real evidence of smoking
cigarettes
is
for
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instance, many
people
have been experiencing lung cancer. Not only cancer, but other
illness
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illnesses
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as well
such
as heart disease, and pregnancy issues. Ultimately, smoking activities could lessen the year of
people
’s lives.
This
invention
also
aligns with
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researcher
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findings.
Secondly
,
smoking
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the smoking
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habit will
also
damage the passive smokers’
health
. Even though they are not smoking directly,
nevertheless
,
cigarettes
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particles could be inhaled by them and degrade their
health
.
Moreover
,
this
activity will be so much
dangerous
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if the particles are inhaled by babies or toddlers. That will cause breathing problems
to
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them.
This
activity will create an inconvenient environment towards other
people
In conclusion, smoking
cigarettes
is not beneficial at all. Government should ban and control the supply and production of
cigarettes
.
Besides
that,
government
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should
also
create strict rules regarding
this
issue, both for the company and consumers. Smokers should have to think of other
people
who do not smoke and together create a convenient environment.
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