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"Prevention is better than cure" Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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 it goes without saying that prevention is better than cure.
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 why, in recent years, there has been a growing body of opinion in favour of putting more resources into
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 education and preventive measures. The argument is that ignorance of,
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, basic hygiene or the dangers of an unhealthy diet or lifestyle needs to be combatted by special nationwide publicity campaigns,
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 longer-term
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 education. Obviously, there is a strong
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 argument for catching any medical condition as early as possible. There is
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 an economic argument for doing so. Statistics demonstrate the cost-effectiveness of treating a condition in the early stages, rather than delaying until more expensive and prolonged treatment is necessary.
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 there are social or economic costs. perhaps in terms of loss of earnings for the family concerned or unemployed benefit paid by the state. So far so good, but the difficulties start when we try to define what the 'proportion of the budget"should be, particularly if the funds will be 'diverted from treatment". Decisions on exactly how much of the total
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 budget should be spent in
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 way are not a matter for the non-specialist
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 but should be made on the basis of an accepted
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 service model.
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 is the point at which real problems occur- the formulation of the model. How do we accurately measure which
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 education campaigns are effective in both medical and financial terms? How do we agree about the medical efficacy of various screening programmes,
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, when the medical establishment itself does not agree? A very rigorous process of evaluation is called for
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 so that we can make informed decisions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive measures
  • health education
  • public awareness
  • proactive approach
  • unsustainable
  • economic productivity
  • healthcare system
  • vaccinations
  • curative measures
  • comprehensive healthcare
  • financial burden
  • incidence
  • preventable diseases
  • eradicating
  • controlling
  • allocated
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