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Maintaining public libraries is now a waste of money since computer technology is already replacing their function. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The maps illustrate a coastal area in 1950 and its current situation in Australia.
Overall
,
this
 place has witnessed noticeable developments with regard to facilities,
although
 some parts remain without any changes. In 1950, the road, that connected
inner
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the inner
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 city with
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the
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beach
 area, was ended in
car
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the car
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 park, and just off the broad
the
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playground used to be existed. There were four dining tables in the vicinity of
playground
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the playground
a playground
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. A pavilion was located between
car
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the car
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 park and dining rooms. There were
also
 two pools on either
sides
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 of each in
a
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equal size. Lighthouse was located in the southeast of the
beach
. Nowadays,
beach
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the beach
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 has undergone some changes. The road was extended toward the lighthouse, which is extended in size. The playground is destroyed and gave its place to
new
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 car park,
while
 the old one is
also
 extended. The pool,
in
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on
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western
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the western
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 side of
beach
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the beach
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, is doubled in size and a restaurant
is
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been
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 developed in its vicinity.
Moreover
, surf clubs are constructed close to both schools. Dining tables, pavilion and one of those pools remained unchanged.
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