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In some countries, people these days spend very little time with their children. What are the causes of this? Whom does this affect more, parents or children?

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Nowadays,
parents
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 fail to spend quality
time
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 with their
children
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 in some parts of the world.
This
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 essay will explore why
people
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 who
work
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 have little
time
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 to spend with family and why it will have a negative impact on their
children
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 in the future.
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 it is understandable that
majority
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 of
people
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work
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 and have careers to build,
this
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 brings about a detrimental factor in regards to spending
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 at home with their
children
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. In the past few
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 the cost of living has dramatically increased, and in order to compensate,
people
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 are required to
work
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 longer hours or find a job that has a higher pay. Increased
work
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time
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 is the key to paying off bills and household expenses
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 being able to ensure that they can provide for their
children
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.
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, as they spend additional
time
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 at
work
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, they not only have reduced
time
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 but minimal energy as well. They will be too fatigued to be able to play with their young ones and would want to relax prior to the following day at
work
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. If
parents
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 continue to dedicate increased
time
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work
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, their
children
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 will grow up, in the long run, feeling neglected and depressed
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 those who are able to spend an abundance of
time
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 with their families.
Children
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 need to spend
time
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 with their
parents
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 in order to have a happy and healthy childhood. Mannerisms and values stem from
parents
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, and if young
people
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 grow up in an empty household,
this
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 will greatly affect the way they perceive and approach relationships with others as an adult. In short, they will lead difficult lives emotionally,
in contrast
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 to what their
parents
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 hoped for. In conclusion,
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 it is necessary for
people
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 to
work
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 and provide for their families,
parents
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 ought to dedicate
time
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 towards their
children
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. If they fail to ensure quality
time
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,
children
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 may grow up with a poor attitude and that will cause them to suffer in social settings.
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