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In some countries, people these days spend very little time with their children. What are the causes of this? Whom does this affect more, parents or children?

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Nowadays,
parents
 fail to spend quality
time
 with their
children
 in some parts of the world.
This
 essay will explore why
people
 who
work
 have little
time
 to spend with family and why it will have a negative impact on their
children
 in the future.
While
 it is understandable that
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
work
 and have careers to build,
this
 brings about a detrimental factor in regards to spending
time
 at home with their
children
. In the past few
decades
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 the cost of living has dramatically increased, and in order to compensate,
people
 are required to
work
 longer hours or find a job that has a higher pay. Increased
work
time
 is the key to paying off bills and household expenses
as well as
 being able to ensure that they can provide for their
children
.
However
, as they spend additional
time
 at
work
, they not only have reduced
time
 but minimal energy as well. They will be too fatigued to be able to play with their young ones and would want to relax prior to the following day at
work
. If
parents
 continue to dedicate increased
time
at
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work
, their
children
 will grow up, in the long run, feeling neglected and depressed
from
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 those who are able to spend an abundance of
time
 with their families.
Children
 need to spend
time
 with their
parents
 in order to have a happy and healthy childhood. Mannerisms and values stem from
parents
, and if young
people
 grow up in an empty household,
this
 will greatly affect the way they perceive and approach relationships with others as an adult. In short, they will lead difficult lives emotionally,
in contrast
 to what their
parents
 hoped for. In conclusion,
although
 it is necessary for
people
 to
work
 and provide for their families,
parents
 ought to dedicate
time
 towards their
children
. If they fail to ensure quality
time
,
children
 may grow up with a poor attitude and that will cause them to suffer in social settings.
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