IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Should parents be obliged to immunise their children against common childhood diseases? Or do individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? What is your view of this practise?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Vaccinations are indispensable for a
child
Use synonyms
's
overall
Linking Words
 well-being. Whether immunisation against possibly fatal childhood illnesses should be obligatory, is a topic of serious debate. The advocates of free will, strongly disagree. From my perspective, I am a proponent of the statement that immunisation against diseases of childhood should be made mandatory regardless of parents' wishes. Getting immunised against diseases is undeniably a basic right of every
child
Use synonyms
. It has proven benefits as it protects the body from getting severely ill and spreading it
further
Linking Words
 to friends and family. The infamous plague of the 'Chickenpox virus' was only defeated after immunising everyone at risk without giving them a choice. If vaccines are not made obligatory, parents might back out from agreeing to immunise their children for redundant and illogical reasons.
This
Linking Words
 will not only put the
child
Use synonyms
's life at risk but of everyone around the
child
Use synonyms
's. Other compelling reasons are safety and assurance that years of comprehensive research by scientists have been published. Statistical data has proved that the advantages of immunisation surpass the few ill effects by far. The COVID-19 vaccine saved millions of lives, albeit many were sceptical about the vaccine at
first,
Linking Words
thereby, government enforcement was imperative for everyone's safety. Sometimes,
due to
Linking Words
 differences in opinion and a lack of trust in science, parents cannot decide whether vaccines are safe to be given to a
child
Use synonyms
.
Therefore
Linking Words
, in
such
Linking Words
 scenarios, government policies, backed up by science, should step in to ensure children's safety and well-being.
To conclude
Linking Words
 from the aforementioned discussion, receiving timely vaccinations is of utmost importance for every
child
Use synonyms
 regardless of their parent's decision.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: