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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the earnings of five different professions in the UK,
whereas
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 the table provides data on how many
hours
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 these professionals
work
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 weekly (average)
along with
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 their salaries after three years.
Overall
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, underground drivers and
firefighters
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 make the most money
while
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 nurses make the least earns,
whereas
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firefighters
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 and teachers
work
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 more
hours
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 a
week
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 than other professionals. The bar chart states that Underground drivers and
firefighters
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 make the highest amount of money among the five categories. These two earn around 50,000 (underground driver) and 40,00 (firefighter) without experience and approximately 51,000 and 42,000 dollars after three years of working. Police and Nurses are the two lowest paid jobs at around 21,000 (*22,000 after experience) and 15,000 (*18,000 after experience) dollars, respectively;
however
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, nurses increase most in salary after years of working. The table, on the other ,hand displays that both teachers and
firefighters
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work
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 longer
hours
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 than other people in the other sectors here. These professionals both
work
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 55
hours
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 a
week
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, followed by police who
work
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 40
hours
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 a
week
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. Even though the bar chart showed that Underground Drivers make the most money, they
also
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work
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 the least
hours
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 per
week
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 at 36
hours
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, work, firefighters, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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