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nowadays people use bicycles less as a form of transport. Why is that? What can we do to encourage people uae bicycles more

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In today’s developed world, it is true that
bicycles
 have been used less as a means of transportation.
This
 phenomenon is caused by its inconvenience and the fast-paced development of modern society and I personally believe that it is beneficial
due to
 health improvement and protecting the environment. There are a number of rationales that trigger the decrease in utilizing
bicycles
 on a daily basis, the main reason is uncommon in economic situations because of the delay that it causes.
For example
, if Amazon uses
bicycles
 to deliver products for their customers
instead
 of using other transportation like airplanes or ships it will take more time for money to go back to the company of the Amazon and
this
 issue will affect the economy of the company. Another cause is that after a few decades, humans have developed breakthroughs
such
 as cars, motorbikes and aircraft. Take something as an example, in previous
generations
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bicycles
 became convenient transport.
However
, nowadays the young generation would rather drive cars or motorbikes than
bicycles
 as the main form of transport.
In addition
 to the popularity of people using
bicycles
 less as a form of transport, it can provide numerous important benefits. The first upside is to keep people healthy. Those who use engine-operated vehicles
instead
 of
bicycles
 contract many severe diseases
such
 as cardiovascular issues and tuberculosis, putting unprecedented pressure on the medical system of a nation. Another merit is to protect the environment because
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 a lot of vehicles that run
with
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on
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 gasoline will expel carbon dioxide into the atmosphere leading to the greenhouse effect There are many ways to persuade citizens to drive
bicycles
. First and foremost, the government should build more bicycle service stations in many different places for free driving to attract everyone to use
this
 service In conclusion,
bicycles
 have been used less and can have their root in the inconvenience and fast development of the modern world.
Furthermore
, it is utterly advantageous because of its positive effect on human health and
environmentalprotection
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environmental protection
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and flows logically. Currently, the essay structure is present, but some arguments could be better organized. For example, the economic impact of using bicycles by companies like Amazon should be clearly separated from general points about the convenience for individual users.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and statistics to strengthen your arguments. For instance, quoting statistics about health benefits of cycling or environmental impact could provide strong evidence to back your points.
task achievement
Avoid combining multiple ideas in one sentence without clear separation. Some sentences are lengthy and could be split for better clarity.
task achievement
The essay addresses both parts of the task well by discussing reasons why bicycles are used less and suggesting ways to encourage their use.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the main ideas of the essay.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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