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using animals to test the safety of cosmetic or drugs used for medical reasons is never acceptable. To what extent do you agree with this statement.

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In today's ,era some people think that they should encourage
teenagers
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 to help some
communities
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 by doing some of their
work
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 in their free time as they think that it will help both
communities
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 and youngsters in different ways. I totally agree with
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 statement and I will discuss
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 topic in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, I would like to say that
teenagers
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 should definitely do some
volunteer
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work
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 for some
communities
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 because with these little unpaid ,
jobs
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 they can learn a lot which will help them in their future like when they will start looking for their
jobs
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 they can add these
volunteer
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work
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 in their resume which will help them find a good
job
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as well as
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 employers going to be really impressed with these unpaid
job
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 so they can find their first
job
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 as quickly as possible. For ,example if a person helped in a public library they going to learn how to
work
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 as a librarian so it is going to be really easy for them to get a
job
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 either as a librarian or in a bookshop because of their
volunteer
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work
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 experience.
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,
teenagers
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 will learn time management skills which is a good skill for adding to their resume
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 will help them in the future as well when they will
work
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 part-time and continue their studies in college.
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, it will be very helpful for public
communities
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 to get volunteers for their help because it is really hard for them to find a
job
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 these days when everybody is so busy people are doing multiple
jobs
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 these days because of inflation so nobody wants to arrange some time for
volunteer
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jobs
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 and old people cannot do
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jobs
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 because of their health issues.
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 it is really hard for some
communities
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 to pay for some
jobs
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 so they cannot afford to hire an employee. For,instance in Canada the minimum wage rate of a labour
job
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 is around $14 to $15 which is a lot for public
communities
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 to afford if they are not earning much. In conclusion, I would like to say that
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 idea is really good for both
teenagers
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 and
communities
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 as both will get lots of help from
this
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 like
communities
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 do not need to pay anything and
teenagers
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 going to learn a lot.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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