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Nowaday, more and more people commit crimes. What are causes and solutions?

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crime
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 rates are a major problem in the world these days. An increasing number of individuals tend to engage in criminal activities. In
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 essay, I would be discussing the factors of
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 trend and what can be done to solve the issue.
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, lack of employment is one of the causes of
people
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 engage themselves in unlawful activity .
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,
people
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 in
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 find it difficult to make ends meet for their family like providing food and paying their children's school fees.
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, a young man was charged with theft in my street
last
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 month and a policeman asked why he engaged in stealing. And he replied with an answer that it is because he was hungry.
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, graduates with good results have no choice but to sit down at home for years after being done with their degree because of the lack of job opportunities in the country. Another reason is the lack of
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 in the community.
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 the high level of
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 is getting worse every year, little has been done it. Certainly, it gives armed robbers the opportunity to steal from houses that have no fences or
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 cameras.
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, thieves came to steal a car from my apartment
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 year because the house was not fenced.
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, to tackle the highlighted issues leading to criminal activity percentage, the government can play an important role
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 individuals can contribute how to solve illegal acts in the country. If government should provide more employment opportunities in
society
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, they get to employ more
people
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 to get them busy and make earrings for themselves,
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 will reduce the rate to some extent. Another way to solve the problem is for
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 in power to provide
security
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 cameras or surveillance in
society
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 to protect
people
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 and
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 prevent armed robberies from indulging in
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. In conclusion, the best solution to curb
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 rates is to provide job opportunities for
people
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 in the country and installation of
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 cameras.
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,
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 should
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 pay more attention to their
society
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.
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