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Nowaday, more and more people commit crimes. What are causes and solutions?

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High
crime
 rates are a major problem in the world these days. An increasing number of individuals tend to engage in criminal activities. In
this
 essay, I would be discussing the factors of
this
 trend and what can be done to solve the issue.
Firstly
, lack of employment is one of the causes of
people
 engage themselves in unlawful activity .
In other words
,
people
 in
society
 find it difficult to make ends meet for their family like providing food and paying their children's school fees.
For example
, a young man was charged with theft in my street
last
 month and a policeman asked why he engaged in stealing. And he replied with an answer that it is because he was hungry.
As a result
, graduates with good results have no choice but to sit down at home for years after being done with their degree because of the lack of job opportunities in the country. Another reason is the lack of
security
 in the community.
Although
 the high level of
crime
 is getting worse every year, little has been done it. Certainly, it gives armed robbers the opportunity to steal from houses that have no fences or
security
 cameras.
For instance
, thieves came to steal a car from my apartment
last
 year because the house was not fenced.
Secondly
, to tackle the highlighted issues leading to criminal activity percentage, the government can play an important role
as well as
 individuals can contribute how to solve illegal acts in the country. If government should provide more employment opportunities in
society
, they get to employ more
people
 to get them busy and make earrings for themselves,
this
 will reduce the rate to some extent. Another way to solve the problem is for
people
 in power to provide
security
 cameras or surveillance in
society
 to protect
people
 and
also
 prevent armed robberies from indulging in
crime
. In conclusion, the best solution to curb
crime
 rates is to provide job opportunities for
people
 in the country and installation of
security
 cameras.
In addition
,
people
 should
also
 pay more attention to their
society
.
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