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Some people think that spending large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities is a waste of money. They think that this money should be used to improve existing public transport. To what extent do you agree / disagree ?

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Some
people
 think that constructing fast
trains
 between
cities
 is a
wast
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 of money and should spend the money on developing existing public transport,
whereas
others
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other
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 groups claim that there is nothing bad in building new railway lines. From my point of view, I agree with the latter view for many reasons, described in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, constructing fast
trains
to
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in
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 other
cities
 offers a better life for all
people
 around the country. One of the major
reason
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reasons
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 is to reduce
traffic
congestions
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congestion
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, especially during public
holiday
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holidays
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. Most
people
 often travel
and
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back
their
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 hometown
in
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at
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a weekend
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weekend
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weekends
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 or public
holiday
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holidays
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,
leaded
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led
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 to the
traffic
 on the road.
Thus
, the fast
trains
 will be a better alternative to get away from the
traffic
.
In addition
, taking very fast
trains
 would help
people
 save more time,
comparing
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compared
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 to other public
transports
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transport
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 like a bus.
Furthermore
, building new railway lines not only causes
the
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transportation faster
,
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apply
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 but
also
improve
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improves
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an
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the
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economic
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in
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of
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 the country.
In other words
,
holiday makers
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holidaymakers
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 mostly decide to visit only one or two
cities
 because of
a
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the
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 distance. They need to spend a long time between each place.
Therefore
,
tourist
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tourists
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 could visit many more
cities
 easier by the fast
trains
, leading to improve
the
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apply
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economy. In conclusion, I strongly disagree that it is a waste of money to construct new railway lines for very fast
trains
 because it provides many benefits to
population
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the population
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 and the country
such
 as reducing
traffic
 congestion and
save
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saving
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 more time, and
increase
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increasing
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 the economy
tourism
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of tourism
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.
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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
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  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transportation needs
  • Infrastructure
  • High-speed rail
  • Economic impact
  • Development
  • Sustainable transport
  • Carbon footprint
  • Congestion
  • Accessibility
  • Inclusive
  • Long-term benefits
  • Short-term benefits
  • Public transport system
  • Investment
  • Urbanization
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