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The plan below show a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate the degree to which a
school
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campus
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 has changed since 1985.
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, the
school
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 has experienced significant alterations to accommodate the growing number of students, the most prominent of which are additional
classrooms
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 and the construction of various sports and educational amenities.
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 changes have
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 been made to the
school
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's access and parking facilities. In 1985, the
school
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 had an enrollment of 1500 students.
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 the west of the
campus
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, there was a cluster of facilities, including
classrooms
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, a small parking lot, a library, and an office,
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 on the east side stood a block of
classrooms
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 with two storeys. The students accessed the
campus
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 through the entrance and exit points positioned on both sides of a large car park in the north, with a road branching off in the middle of the map, leading to spacious playing fields in the south. At present, the student population has risen significantly to 2300. Whilst the office remains intact, the library has been reduced in size and become a new learning resources
center
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 housing a computer room, making way for the relocation of the now expanded classroom building. Just south of
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 is a newly built gymnasium with an indoor swimming pool, overtaking approximately half of the playing fields. Meanwhile, a third floor has been added to the classroom block, accompanied by more
classrooms
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 being built to its south. In the north, the small car park has been completely removed, and the rectangular one has been reshaped into a semicircle.
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, a group of trees has been planted, replacing the road in the
center
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 of the
campus
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