Many people leave their home country and go to other countries to live and work. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

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this
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era, many people leave their home country and go to other
countries
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to live and
work
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my opinion. A popular belief is that
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going to other
countries
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to live and
work
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has been considered as an essential thing for human activities
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a high salary and experience.
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to that, some people who consider
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to overseas to live and
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could gain
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plenty of options rather than their home country, because individuals can follow the modern era to use cutting-edge technologies as important elements to get
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better life of
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and convenience environment at
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. Even though living and working in other
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countries
has difficulties
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and
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,
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finances, or
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environment
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,
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has a huge opportunity to obtain a better result.
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, if citizens focus on upgrading
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to attract
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productivity, they will earn more
incomes
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, focusing on the skill could incline the amount of good experience not only for today but
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also
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days.
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, there are several issues or problems, to live or survive in other
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to become crucial and famous in society’s view by having high cost and homesickness. First thing
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in
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and
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work
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in other
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could obtain and increase
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of development, because several inhabitants have
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and hope about the easiness of financing.
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, having homesickness could become negative impacts or consequences, because society will not agree, and advocate focusing on infrastructure, and advocate
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high
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technology
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developments have an ideal opportunity to become potential incomes, these technologies and
automations
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automation
could not be
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implementation
and acceptable, because
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can make people
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their jobs.
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, if several societies understand and comprehend
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the
technology
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impact, they will appreciate the meaning of
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technology
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to avoid feeling hesitant in society.
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, technologies have been assumed as good elements for
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to know and admit the
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opportunity
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some years ago until today’s era.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migrant
  • Brain drain
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Remittances
  • Expatriate
  • Diaspora
  • Transnational
  • Host country
  • Country of origin
  • Push and pull factors
  • Standard of living
  • Political asylum
  • Cross-cultural
  • Migrant workforce
  • Integration policy
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