Digital communication technology such as e-mail, instant messaging and social media has improved communication and connections between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reason for your answers and include examples nd from your own knowledge or experience.

The development of the
internet
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of
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really made almost every aspect
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daily life can be done through technology.
For example
, the
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of many
media
communication
using technology like social
media
, instant messaging and email have advanced the
communication
and the relationship of the people. From my point of view,
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I strongly agree with
this
opinion.
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essay will outline the benefits and an example regarding the usage of
these digital
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this digital communication technology
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communication
technology.
Firstly
,
this
digital
communication
media
made everyone could communicate and socialise with each other regardless
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distance. Even if
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separated by
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of miles and have
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difference
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time zone, they are still can be talking with each other.
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, the presence of
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meeting applications helped the company to run the business because they could arrange the meeting with their clients or customers every time and everywhere. Moving on
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next,
it is very helpful to people who are having
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limitations
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to meet their friends or their family.
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, when the Covid-19 pandemic happened, people all over the world have to isolate
them self
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from
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others so they could not talk with their loved
one
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directly.
Therefore
,
this
digital
communication
channel becomes a saviour so they still can talk with their family and keep them updated about their condition.
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eternally grateful for the
emergences
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of
this
digital
media
communication
because it is very essential to every human being right now.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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