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The range and quality of foods have been improved with the development of technology and scientific advance. Some people think it is a good development while others consider it harmful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Scientific advances have an impact on many aspects of our lives, including
food
. I believe that an increase in
food
 variety is beneficial to humans,
although
 it has some problems. The development of
food
technology
 has been beneficial to
people
's
health
.
This
 is because
technology
 provides them with a wider choice of high-quality
food
 to eat a balanced diet. Some perishable foods in the past,
such
 as fruits and vegetables, are now fresher and easier to preserve, allowing
people
 to eat them after a period of time.
In addition
, some dietary supplements have been developed to improve our nutritional conditions and promote our
health
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think that the application of advanced
food
technology
 will bring some unpredictable
health
 risks,
although
 it can provide more choices for our diet. Genetic engineering, because it changes the genetic characteristics of natural
crops
, but the
health
 effects of eating these GM
crops
 are unknown.
In addition
, some chemicals have been used to extend the shelf life of some foods,
although
 these chemicals may be harmful to our
health
. In my opinion, agriculture is able to feed a growing population thanks to technological advancements. The main reason for
this
 development is
technology
Add an article
a technology
the technology
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 that keeps many
crops
 free from pests and diseases and
also
 makes these
crops
 grow faster, mature multiple times a year, and increase yields on farmland.
This
 could boost
food
 production, and these emerging technologies are especially important for developing countries or countries with large numbers of poor
people
, where many
people
 are still experiencing famine.
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