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The range and quality of foods have been improved with the development of technology and scientific advance. Some people think it is a good development while others consider it harmful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Scientific advances have an impact on many aspects of our lives, including
food
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. I believe that an increase in
food
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 variety is beneficial to humans,
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 it has some problems. The development of
food
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technology
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 has been beneficial to
people
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's
health
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.
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 is because
technology
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 provides them with a wider choice of high-quality
food
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 to eat a balanced diet. Some perishable foods in the past,
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 as fruits and vegetables, are now fresher and easier to preserve, allowing
people
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 to eat them after a period of time.
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, some dietary supplements have been developed to improve our nutritional conditions and promote our
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.
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, some
people
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 think that the application of advanced
food
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technology
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 will bring some unpredictable
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 risks,
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 it can provide more choices for our diet. Genetic engineering, because it changes the genetic characteristics of natural
crops
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, but the
health
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 effects of eating these GM
crops
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 are unknown.
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, some chemicals have been used to extend the shelf life of some foods,
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 these chemicals may be harmful to our
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. In my opinion, agriculture is able to feed a growing population thanks to technological advancements. The main reason for
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 development is
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technology
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a technology
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 that keeps many
crops
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 free from pests and diseases and
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 makes these
crops
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 grow faster, mature multiple times a year, and increase yields on farmland.
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 could boost
food
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 production, and these emerging technologies are especially important for developing countries or countries with large numbers of poor
people
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, where many
people
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 are still experiencing famine.

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