Some people think that social networking sites, such as Facebook, have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Technology
has revolutionized the way people
communicate in their personal and professional lives, connecting humans in global real-time networks. However
, some worry that technology
has also
changed communication in many ways, some for the better. From an objective point of view, I think the truth is somewhere in between.
Technology
is an easy thing to blame because it disrupts people
's ability to socialize. As people
rely more and more on typing, their ability to read emotions is declining, and they cannot truly understand the thoughts and emotions of the person on the other side of the screen. However
, for people
who already suffer from social anxiety disorder, the Internet is a safety barrier for
their normal social interaction. Behind Change preposition
to
this
barrier, they tend to be more comfortable saying what they want without risking embarrassment. It's easier for them to look at a screen than to look someone in the eye.
Another point of contention is that technology
affects the quality of communication, with both positive and negative outcomes. It is also
true that while
technology
is creating sophisticated online social networks, it is still surprisingly socially isolating. In some cases, face-to-face connections are being replaced by online communication. This
means that strong social connections will inevitably be replaced by a large number of shallower connections, resulting in people
who may have many online friends but few real friends. This
can lead to depression and loneliness.
In short, technology
is neither good nor bad; it depends on how we use it. The problem, of course, is not the technology
itself, but the direction we end up giving it. When we use technology
correctly, its benefits far outweigh its disadvantages.Submitted by y2083749065 on
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Ensure that each paragraph is focused on a single main point and that ideas are logically structured and presented in a coherent manner.
task completion
Provide more specific examples and elaborate on certain points to further develop the response, ensuring that each aspect of the prompt is addressed thoroughly.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite