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Teachers used to convey information, but now with wide resources of information. some people think that there is no role for teachers to play in modern education others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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In the past, instructors used to data transfer، but today, they prefer to use abroad
resources
information
, which
according to
 some opinion of people that it reduces the roles of
teachers
 in modern training. In my opinion, it can be not through in all Fields. On the one hand, using of transfer of data among some
teachers
 was the main factor for acquiring the best result for their
students
 in the past, because of a lack of other ways for training. Undeniable, instructors always tried to use a variety of methods of training, that help them to achieve:
firstly
, real and correct
information
according to
 scientific methods, that were available.
Secondly
, encourage their
students
 for reading and realise more theory-related scientific books reference.
Finally
, allocation their time to keen
students
 searching and discovering new items. I think
,
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 it is undeniable that the role of
teachers
 in transferring
information
 is too important.
On the other hand
, in the modern world, to make
education
 easily and quickly accessible to
information
 in all situations, that it is possible with trustworthy
resources
 Internet applications and stuff like
this
. Forasmuch as access to
resources
 should be under the supervision of a guide. So, to take
teachers
' roles for granted can not improve
education
 by just considering abroad
resources
. It is not that, a variety of
resources
 can not alter the level of
information
. But, it is that, if we have a compilation of them in our
education
 system. Certainly, our
students
 will be more successful in their training. In fact, in point of my view, the more
teachers
 use modern technology in researching their training, the more progress among
students
 and the educational system. In conclusion, I think, we cannot consider the role of
teachers
 in
education
 even in the modern world just, because of the professional guide role, so, I do not agree with the diminishing effectiveness of
teachers
' roles in training in all situations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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