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Band 8

Last week, you visited a local supermarket and you got satisfactory service. Write a letter to the supermarket manager to thank. In your letter: - introduce yourself; - say why you are satisfied; - say thank you and write about your future visits.

Dear Manager, I hope
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 message finds you well. My name is Monica, and I live on the street adjacent to your store. I am writing to express my sincere gratitude and to commend the outstanding customer service I received during my recent visit. I visited your store
last
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 Thursday, the 25th of May. I was in a hurry to purchase some groceries, as my daughter was unwell at home. In my anxious state, I was struggling to locate a few specific items.
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 I was hurriedly moving through the aisles, one of your staff members approached me and kindly offered her assistance. She not only guided me but
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 personally gathered all the items I needed. I was truly touched by her empathy and professionalism. Please extend my heartfelt thanks to the staff member who helped me, and to the entire team, for going above and beyond when I needed it most. I look forward to visiting your store again. Warm regards, Monica

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coherence and cohesion
Consider breaking down the paragraphs more distinctly, ensuring each one introduces a single main idea to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Ensure all dates and references are accurate to avoid confusion, as you mentioned visiting on the '25th of May', which is a bit misleading in terms of the timeframe if it was last week. Furthermore, it's essential to phrase your thank you in a compelling manner to ensure it resonates with the reader.
suitable writing tone
Your letter maintains a polite and warm tone throughout, which is very effective in conveying your gratitude.
complete response
The anecdote about your shopping experience effectively illustrates the level of service provided, making your appreciation more tangible.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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