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Teachers used to convey information, but now with wide resources of information. some people think that there is no role for teachers to play in modern education others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

In the past, instructors used to
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، but today, they prefer to use abroad
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 to some opinion of
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 reduces the
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 of
teachers
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 in modern training. In my opinion, it
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of transfer of data among some
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 was the main factor for acquiring the best
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 for their
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 in the past, because of a lack of other ways for training.
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, instructors always tried to use a variety of methods of training,
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 help them to achieve:
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, real and correct
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 scientific methods,
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 were available.
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, encourage their
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 and realise more theory-related scientific
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 their time to keen
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 searching and discovering new items. I think
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 it is undeniable that the role of
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 in transferring
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 is too important.
On the other hand
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, in the modern world, to make
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 easily and quickly accessible to
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it is possible with trustworthy
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Internet applications and stuff like
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. Forasmuch as access to
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 should be under the supervision of a guide. So, to take
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' roles for granted can not improve
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 by just considering
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resources
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. It is not that
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 a variety of
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 can not alter the level of
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. But, it is that
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 if we have a compilation of them in our
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 system. Certainly, our
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 will be more successful in their training. In fact, in
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 view, the more
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 use modern technology in researching their training, the more progress among
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 and the educational system. In conclusion, I think
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 we cannot consider the role of
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 in
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 even in the modern world just
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 because of the professional guide role, so
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 I do not agree with the diminishing effectiveness of
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' roles in training in all situations.

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Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic. Try to keep sentences clear and to the point.
coherence cohesion
Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader. Make sure each idea is fully developed and connected.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points. This helps to illustrate your ideas better and makes your argument stronger.
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You have expressed your opinion clearly, which is good for task achievement.
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You have attempted to discuss both views of the topic, showing an understanding of the question.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your main point well, which is important for a strong ending.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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