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22.Research says more and more business training and business meeting taking place online. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It has become a
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 that more and more business training and seminars are being held online.
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 some may worry about the negatives of
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, in my opinion, its advantages far outweigh the disadvantages. The main disadvantage of the online commerce
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 is that there is less direct interaction. The audience may not have the opportunity to meet face-to-face with the trainer or speaker and
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 have to rely on written communication.
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, new video conferencing capabilities allow for simultaneous communication between all participants.
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, another most commonly mentioned limitation is hardware. Some training requires professional equipment or locations, which are not available on the Internet platform. Some
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 feel that watching cooking training online but not being able to interact with the chef in real-time and receive their advice, greatly reduces the efficiency of online teaching and training. Despite the aforementioned negatives, I see online business courses as a positive development for a variety of reasons. An obvious advantage is that it allows more
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 to participate. Traditional lectures are only open to local residents and most of them have a limited number of
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 the Internet allows
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 from all over the world to participate in any event in the virtual world. Another major draw to organizers' preference for online events is that they are far more cost-effective, meaning substantial savings can be made on everything from renting and furnishing meeting rooms to providing food and beverages. In conclusion,
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 I recognize the possible downsides of online business meetings, I see them as a positive
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