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Advertisements encourage consumers to buy in quantity rather than promote quality. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent days, a topic has aroused heated discussions in society about whether advertising prompts
people
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 to blindly buy quantity without promoting
quality
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. Some
people
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 think that advertising makes
people
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 pay more attention to
quality
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instead
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 of big purchases,
while
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 others hold the opposite view. In my opinion, advertising encourages
people
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 to buy more
instead
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 of promoting
quality
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. On the one hand, advertising encourages
people
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 to pursue fashion. They will post some of the most popular contemporary clothing and items to attract
people
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 to buy. Some
people
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 will buy the newest things
first,
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while
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 others will follow suit to buy because of their self-esteem needs and blind comparison psychology, which leads to
people
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 buying new things in large quantities and ignoring the
quality
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. Advertising can
also
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 give
people
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 the illusion that shopping can make them happy, even if some functions exist only in advertising. The moment they get the
product
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, they find that they will be deceived, but even so they will not hesitate to buy the
product
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 advertised next time.
This
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 is
also
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 one of the reasons why
people
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 buy a lot of
products
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 regardless of
quality
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.
On the other hand
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,
due to
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 the fierce competition in
product
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 advertisements, the
products
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 advertised in the advertisements will contain a lot of information, and
people
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 can use
this
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 useful information to compare
products
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, so consumers can buy the best
products
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 in
this
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 way. Good item. So advertising can
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 make
people
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 pay more attention to
quality
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. In general, I am very much in favour of advertising that drives
people
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 to buy a lot, but the focus should not be solely on the quantity of the
product
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, but
also
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 on its
quality
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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