Governments should lower arts budgets to allocate more money to education. Do you agree with this view?

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It is believed
art
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budgets
needs
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to be reduced to increase
money
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spending
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for
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education
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. I can not say that ''I completely agree with
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opinion''
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, there are some acceptable sides
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this
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recommend
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. Budgets planning to spend
for
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artificial things should be decreased but
it
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they
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should not spend
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any other thing unless
governments
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have to spend it. From my point of
view
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governments
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must reduce their all
spendings
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spending
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because
governments
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earn
money
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from
tax
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taxes
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and it is the citizens'
money
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. Politicians administrate
governments
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so they decide
that
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where taxes should spend. As I have mentioned taxes belong to citizens and no one can spend
other
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ones
money
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as
logical
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as
owner
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the owner
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.
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governments
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should lower arts budgets. They should not interfere
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artists
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with artists
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because when politicians have
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the rights
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rights
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right
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to spend the
money
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most probably they will spend it for
artist
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artists
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supporting them
instead
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of successful or talented ones.
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of
this
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art
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will be affected negatively.
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if
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quit
spend
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other ones'
money
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for
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supporting
artists
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,
artists
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will not be
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because companies already support successful
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.
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in my
country
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government shares taxes with
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supporting them.
Due to
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the fact that
,
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art
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has not been improved enough
although
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, in The USA government does not waste
money
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and their productivity is much more than my nation experienced. On the other side, if
governments
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have to spend
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money
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they should spend it for
education
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rather than spending it to
art
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. As it is mentioned in the first paragraph spending
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for
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art
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does not help to
improving
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art
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but spending it
to
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education
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better than other
spendings
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because new generations will live in the
country
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and if they will not
qualified
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the
country
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will experience being unsuccessful in every crucial part of life including
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. Recent research sign that some supportive materials needing technology like videos or slides can be helpful
for
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improving
understanding
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the understanding
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capacity of students.
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, no one does not sell technology for free so
money
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is needed thing for reaching technology. In conclusion, it is
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belief that
governments
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should spend more
money
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for
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education
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and they should create
financal
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financial
source
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sources
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with
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by
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decreasing
money
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spending
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for
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artificial things. I do not totally agree with
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opinion but I do not support every
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of
idea
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the idea
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. I define
my self
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myself
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as a liberal and I do not want to give rights about spending my
money
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to the politicians but I
have
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not enough power
for
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obstacle that.
Art
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or
education
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it
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is still
spended
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by someone. At least I hope they will spend it
for
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education
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because it is more important for my
country
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's future.
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  • allocate funds
  • economic growth
  • societal well-being
  • disparities in access
  • quality education
  • equal opportunities
  • erode cultural heritage
  • national identity
  • creative industries
  • contribute significantly to the economy
  • loss of jobs
  • stifle innovation
  • well-rounded society
  • intellectual development
  • cultural development
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