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Some think the best way to reduce the time people spend in travelling to work is to replace the parks and gardens close to the city centres with apartment buildings where commuters can live, while other disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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With the development of the economy, the size of cities is increasing, leading to more congested road traffic.
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, in turn, increases people's commuting
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, causing them to spend a lot of
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 on the way to
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. Some argue that converting parks and gardens into residential buildings would solve the problem,
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 others disagree. In my opinion, changing the land use type is not the best solution. On the one hand, transforming the entertainment venues in the
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 into residential land would result in shorter commuting times for
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 residents compared to those living in the suburbs. They would
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 have more convenient travel options. Previously, commuting in the suburbs required taking the subway or bus,
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, in
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 scenario, residents would only need to walk or ride a bicycle to get to and from
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, which is close to their company.
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 would save
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 and reduce pressure on the roads during rush hour, resulting in less traffic congestion.
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, for those cities with relatively congested
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 centres, the method of developing different commercial districts can be adopted. Real estate developers and companies often prefer to choose locations near commercial districts.
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 has multiple commercial districts so that everyone can
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 nearby and reduce commuting
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.
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 can not only disperse the flow of people but
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 relieve the pressure of road traffic. In my opinion, for some cities with many high-tech industries, the products of these companies often do not require human on-site operations, but adopt the method of machine OEM. The company or the government can encourage employees who live far away to
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 remotely from home so that they will not have to It is necessary to go to the office every day to
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, and with advanced technology and convenient communication, the company can transmit information to employees who
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 at home at any
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 not only saves the
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 of daily commuting but
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 reduces their living costs.
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