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The chart below shows the internet users (in millions) in different countries in the Middle East as of June 2017. 150 words minimum

The chart below shows the internet users (in millions) in different countries in the Middle East as of June 2017. 150 words minimum
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The bar graph depicts the millions of internet
users
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 divided among nine different countries from the Middle East during June 2017.
Overall
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, Iran is in the first position, with two times more millions of
users
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 in comparison to the other countries. The image clearly shows that the main trend is that 56.7
million
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 Iranians were connected,
while
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 the rest don't overpass 30
million
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 internet
users
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.
However
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, the second habitats from the graph with more
users
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 are from Arabia Saudi with a total of 24.5
million
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 over that month. In the third position, we find the Iraqis where 14
million
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 of them were connected in June. To finalise, we can oversee that the rest of the countries poorly reach 8.52
users
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 per month. In more detail, the average is less than 6
million
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users
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, and the Lebanese were the ones with less population connected
on
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 the internet that month in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words users, million with synonyms.
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