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Changes in ownership of appliances and the number of hours dedicated to the related housework each week over 1920 to 2019

#changes #ownership #appliances #hours #housework #week
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The graphs provided illustrate the changes in
ownership
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 of
appliances
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such
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 as washing
machines
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, refrigerators and
vacuum
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cleaners
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, and the number of hours dedicated to related
housework
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 each week from 1920 to 2019. The number of households owning electrical
appliances
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 has increased over the century.
Ownership
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 of refrigerators rose sharply from 1920 to 1960 before slowing down in the following 20 years and experiencing a plateau afterwards. Meanwhile, household
ownership
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 of washing
machines
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 and
vacuum
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cleaners
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 increases more steadily. Between 2000 to 2019, the trend of households owning washing
machines
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 stopped growing. For
vacuum
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cleaners
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, a small decline in household
ownership
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 can be observed between 1960 to 1980 before continuing to increase after that. One can argue that electronic
appliances
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such
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 as washing
machines
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, refrigerators and
vacuum
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cleaners
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 enabled the related
housework
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 to be done faster.
This
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 is because
housework
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 in 2019 required significantly less time at 10 hours per week to complete, compared to those in 1920 at 50 hours to complete.
As a consequence
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, increased
ownership
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 of household
appliances
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 corresponds to reduced time spent on
housework
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.
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