Today many children and teenagers are overweight and unhealthy. Give reasons to explain why many young people are obese and give some solutions to fix this problem.

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Nowadays, obesity is becoming a vital concern
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youngsters. Because of
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many
children
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suffer from health-related issues. In
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essay, I will be implementing the possible grounds and logical solutions to overcome
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issue.
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with, there are a plethora of concerns
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fatique
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fatigue
and health-related problems in teenagers. First and foremost, an unhealthy lifestyle is an essential concern of obesity in young people. The first instance of
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is eating fast food. Youngsters in today's world prefer to eat fast food rather than homemade food.
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,
children
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don't like to go for physical exercise and don't engage in any physical
games
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, a survey conducted by Indian Turbine in which they analyzed the physical activities
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teenagers
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decreased by 12% in 2022
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back 2011.
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, in
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era both parents are working and don't give proper time to the health of their
children
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. Controversy, there is a score of concerns because of fatigue and health problems in teenagers. These issues can be overcome by taking some suitable manners. One among them is that
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Parents should
regular
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update on the health of their
children
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as what they are eating and which physical activities they are doing.
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, try to keep them away as much as possible from
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a sanitary
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lifestyle to
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exemplary
use of phones and video
games
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.
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, the community should organize some
games
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tournaments and involve their
children
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in traditional
games
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as footfall. In conclusion, it can not be denied that obesity is
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major concern in some
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,
if
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took
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some initiative we will
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diminish
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issue from
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Screen time
  • Balanced diet
  • Nutrients
  • Physical education
  • Parental influence
  • Aggressive marketing
  • Emotional stress
  • Coping mechanism
  • Caloric intake
  • Processed foods
  • Nutrient-dense
  • Health awareness
  • Fast food industry
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